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3/10/13 5:53 P

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I loved your story! Not so sure I'm a good writer...but I would love to read more.

I'm an eternal optimist. I found the Secret; the Eat to Live plan. I will be a Success Story !
I will be wearing that Little Black Dress. The Secret is consistency!


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2/12/13 1:39 P

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Very interesting approach Marion, I can almost see my Dido stalking his prey outside by your words ... excellent!

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2/9/13 3:28 A

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With great patience and precision he stalked his prey. Two out of three caught his movement and scattered, bolting in opposite directions. The third a female, seemed completely unaware. Then she turned and just as he was about to snap, jumped to the right!
Although it was pretty much a routine maneuver for ole' agile Cinnamon Cat Gadabout, his paws, accustomed to the unforgiving asphalt suddenly gave way on the blacktop and it was all he could do to keep from scraping his nose!
At a full stop he regained his balance. He turned to give chase, but stood dead in his tracks. The rodent was still there! Stunned and frowning in actual confusion Gadabout looked the rat over and then felt laughter begin to roll up from his belly.
"So, rodent"-he said with a sadistical grin when the rat still hadn't move---you will stand and fight? Fool. You were born with no brains."
"You should leave." the rat said simply. "There is nothing for you here. Go back to whatever rock it was you crawled out from under."
"Sure thing rodent." said Gadabout. "I'll gladly go but only with you in my belly!'
Barely had he moved when the rat came at him! It had landed on his face before he could even open his mouth wide enough to bite. When his teeth came together with a snap, he found only air. When he landed and turned around he could smell the blood. His left eye was beginning to swell. There were three scratches across his face, one nicking his eyelid.
That was close! He glared back at the rat and growled, but before he could move he felt a claw rip into his nose! He jumped and snapped again but got nothing! The wound on his nose was a bad one!
Gadabout took a step back and stared at the now motionless rat that stood menacingly staring back at him.
"Back to your rock cat." she insisted.
" All I'd have to do is howl and a whole horde of cats would be here. How brave would you be then, rat? We would tear you to pieces."
"How would it matter to you?" answered the rat. "For surely, they would turn on you as look at you."
" A cat will not turn on another cat." Gadabout said, smiling with assurance. He had opened his mouth too far and the blood from his nose had poured in. He spit it out.
"No, said the rat, they will not. But a dead rat to feast upon among so many would surely cause a fight for survival and dead you might be anyway."
The rat's delivery of this was so convincing Gadabout actually believed her.
The rat began to crouch as if to strike again. Gadabout let go a fierce hiss and stepped back. He'd knew when he'd had enough.
As he began to walk away he got to thinking, and the very thought of a rat standing up to him made him livid. And how dare she make such assertions! Yes, indeed how dare her. Well, he'd soon show her what it meant to intimidate Cinnamon Cat Gadabout!
Those words were fighting words. As soon as his wounds had sufficiently healed he'd go back and show that rodent a thing or too! Yes sir! And he wouldn't be going in alone! No siree!
Gadabout turned and glanced back over his shoulder to see whether or not the she rat was watching his departure, but she was nowhere in sight; at least not in his range of vision. Even though she had seemingly left he couldn't relax enough to contract his claws.
In time however, he felt his fluffed up tail flatten out and he broke into a canter. As he rounded the corner and began to descend the winding, twisting, downhill alley, he saw Helina watching for him.
"You lucked out." She said smiling. "You know you wouldn't have been much of an award anyway."
"What, you were there? What did you see?" he asked with mixed surprise and agitation.
"No, well yes, not exactly, and I saw nothing." she answered impertinently.
"Then how do you know anything?"
"You forget my dear Gadabout that I have eyes and ears all over this town?"
Gadabout grunted in disgust. "The reward is never worth it with that kind of slime." he stated through gritted teeth. "Rats are so filthy, Yuk!"
"Well I'm just glad to see that you are still all in one piece," she told him.
Helina had always admired his strength and urban looks. She was always a sweetheart and looked good too. Black as night she was with her display of long silken shiny fur and those flashy long whiskers. She never flaunted it though. Not like the others. But today Helina neither looked warm or friendly and the feeling was felt by all. She was full of uneasiness and worry. And rightfully so.

TODAY Is MY tomorrow. It's up to ME to shape it, To TAKE CONTROL and seize EVERY opportunity. The POWER is in the choices I make EVERY day. I eat well, I live well I SHAPE ME!

THE EMPOWERED LIFE. EXPECT IT . BELIEVE IT. RECEIVE IT.
The human will is the most incredible thing. It's what keeps us going when everyone else expects us to quit.

THIS MEANS WAR AGAINST FAT:
I'm too positive to be doubtful, too optimistic to be fearful, and too determined to be defeated.


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2/9/13 3:27 A

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I don't know here. What it takes to get more of you participating in posting supporting and sharing....something totally off the wall maybe. A story perhaps?
Anyone else do some writing? I wrote this story a couple of years ago when I had more time on my hands. Actually finished it too. So I'm going to start it here and write on it a little everyday. It's a children's story.
You can read it comment on it criticize it if you like. So here it is.

And please folks we are putting these stories out there on the honour system. So right from the beginning we are putting our personal copy-writes on them. They are not to be copied in whole or in part.


Edited by: NOMORESTALLING at: 2/9/2013 (18:12)
TODAY Is MY tomorrow. It's up to ME to shape it, To TAKE CONTROL and seize EVERY opportunity. The POWER is in the choices I make EVERY day. I eat well, I live well I SHAPE ME!

THE EMPOWERED LIFE. EXPECT IT . BELIEVE IT. RECEIVE IT.
The human will is the most incredible thing. It's what keeps us going when everyone else expects us to quit.

THIS MEANS WAR AGAINST FAT:
I'm too positive to be doubtful, too optimistic to be fearful, and too determined to be defeated.


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